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Post by Poetic Love on Apr 10, 2005 4:30:15 GMT -4
Why waste your time? By: Poetic Love
Why are you feeling this way? Maybe because I ignored you that day. I was speechless.. I didn't know what to say. We've been away for more than 10 days. I look back upon that day even today, To the day that might have changed my life Maybe I would have made you my wife. Now I know why, and I'll regret it until the day I die. That I walked past you without even a slight sigh. It's now our time to say..goodbye.
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Post by Nymiane on Apr 10, 2005 20:19:55 GMT -4
Hrm.. I've read over your Poetry, it's very emotional, and you can tell what you are feeling, but they are sort of all just splayed out. Rantings and such, which I have no beef with..as you've probably seen my horrid rants.. But I would like to see more collective poetry, as I'm sure you would do great at that! But that's only me.. I'm not saying you did a dreadful job in the least, just I would -like- to see you try a different form, you know?
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Post by Poetic Love on Apr 10, 2005 20:55:15 GMT -4
Yes, I've noticed that I like to rant alot in my poems. I'm working on trying to make my lines relate to eachother. Mostly it's just all spewed out of what I'm feeling at the time like you said. So I guess I'll work on that and sorta remake this.
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Post by zombiehiphopx on Apr 16, 2005 10:36:35 GMT -4
yeees.. i do concur with me' lady
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Post by Nymiane on Jul 14, 2005 16:46:54 GMT -4
Better.
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Post by Poetic Love on Jul 15, 2005 2:16:00 GMT -4
Yea..I've been practicing on my writing skills alot while I was away.
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